Haiku Chat 9 ~ Haiku Inevitability ~

  

N: It is first light here

Shyam: Yes


N: first light - / a dog barks into / crickets' cries


Shyam: Good haiku


N: Thank you


Shyam:


white flowers glow
in cool twilight ~
tiny spring moon


N: more dawn light / colours reborn into / fresh cognition  


N: Very good.  Post it


Shyam: :) Thank you


Shyam: This is great too.  Quiet rudra, very subtle


N: I see


N: It is actually shasei... what I see here


Shyam: Yes


N: Yes


N: I will post these later


N: I have already posted one haiku and five translations


Shyam: I saw that


Shyam: It's excellent


N: Thank you


N: Yes


Shyam:

vishnu sahasranaamam
at last twilight ~
lamps sway
in gentle breeze


N: Just a second


Shyam: Too much twilight?


N: No, that is okay


N: It comes everyday


Shyam: Yes


N: ...but whether "last" is required is my doubt


Shyam:

vishnu sahasranaamam
at twilight ~ lamps sway
in gentle breeze


N:

vishnu sahasranaamam
lamps sway
in gentle breeze


N: or...


Shyam:

vishnu sahasranaamam ~
twilight lamps sway
in gentle breeze


N:

vishnu sahasranaamam ~
twilight lamps sway
in gentle breeze


Shyam: :)


Shyam: Yes


N: :)


N: I did not see yours


Shyam: I know


Shyam: So it stands


N: That is what we seek among all haijin-s  ~ absolute inevitability


Shyam: Yes, I see


N: "Inevitability defines its tonality", as I wrote about free verse


Shyam: Yes


Shyam: Thats a great poem


Shyam: It taught me how to write


N: I see


N: You remember that?


Shyam: Of course


N: Yes, it is slightly didactic


N: Though it was more justifying

  




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